About the Lesson
Today’s lesson was a reminder to stay aware of the critical report and audiovisual task.
Critical Report: Image List
Today’s lesson clarified the purpose of the image list. Initially, I thought it was similar to a reference or bibliography page, but I realized it is used to detail images and enhance the essay’s clarity. Using an image list allows images to be organized separately, preventing the text from appearing cluttered or resembling a magazine format.
My images were in text, as I have my text clearly indicating the things from the image.
Audio Visual Task
I was quite worried about this task as it feels different from what I have done before. During my previous bachelor’s degree in Hong Kong, formal essays did not usually require a presentation video. If they did, it was more of a simple recording of ourselves discussing the key points of the essay, without much informality. This task feels like a new challenge for me.
I am referencing the video shown in class to gain insights into how to approach this task. I aim to ensure that my presentation is both engaging and clear, while effectively conveying the key points.
Progress on Critical Report
I have been consulting five language tutors, along with Matthew, and have received substantial feedback on my essay.
Referencing Issue
Although I have been using the Harvard referencing format for my report, I was unaware that I needed to include the accessed dates for the websites I visited. Since websites are often unstable and may be removed or the links may become invalid over time, it is essential to note the date when the website was accessed.
I was also unaware, or had forgotten, that the references should be arranged in alphabetical order. Consequently, I have reorganized them accordingly.
Word Count Issue
After including all the necessary content, my word count exceeded the requirement by approximately 500 words. As a result, I need to reduce the word count by eliminating unnecessary adjectives and adverbs, removing repetitive phrases, linking sentences more precisely, and deleting irrelevant paragraphs.
Clarity Issue
After completing my first task and presenting it to the tutor, I was informed that some of my points were not directly related to the topic, which not only wasted word count but also affected the clarity of the essay. I attempted to remove or modify these sections, but other issues arose.
Some of my points lacked sufficient elaboration, leading the tutors to ask questions such as, “What does that mean?” “Can you elaborate?” and “Why did this happen?”
I also realized that it is important not to include points that I cannot support or that lack evidence. Otherwise, they do not form a strong argument, but rather appear as unsupported claims.
I aim to refine my critical report and complete the audiovisual video to the best of my ability.